Deleted scene from Memory of Water: The secret log of
the Jansson expedition
In
Memory of Water, the world has been devastated by some great catastrophe
and left with scarce freshwater resources. Printed books have become rare, and
systematic suppression of information has created gaps in people's knowledge of
history.
The
main character, Noria, finds old recordings which fill in some of these gaps,
but the content of the recordings is never revealed in detail. We know they
were left behind by a group of scientists calling themselves the Jansson
expedition, who kept a log of their journey to a contaminated area known as the
Lost Lands.
A
number of readers have asked me about the backstory, or noted in their reviews
that they wished to know more about what happened in the past.
If
you are one of those readers, this is your chance to find out.
An
earlier version of the manuscript explained the events leading to the
drought-ravaged future in more detail. The scene took place near the end of the
book, when Noria set to write down what she had heard on the recordings.
However, when I submitted this version to my writing group, their opinion was
unanimous: the story did not need that information, and the explanatory scene
added no value.
I
thought about this long and hard, and eventually deleted most of the scene.
There
are several reasons for this. First, I agree with my writing group that the
scene disrupts the narrative flow and goes into unnecessary detail. Second,
it's an info dump, which is never a good idea – I dislike them as a reader, and
lash myself over them as a writer. Third, it's too long. And finally, it's more
than a bit preachy.
In
the hindsight, I can see why some readers have found the omission of these details
frustrating, but I stand behind my choice. A shorter, much changed version of
this scene actually survives in Memory of Water.
The
version I'm sharing here is the deleted longer version. I should probably add
that it contains no spoilers, unless you consider the main character writing
something down a spoiler. If you wish to find out what the secret log of the
Jansson expedition contained, read on.
The
voice sought its shape in my mind: its rustling in the loudspeakers of the
past-machine, its pauses and the thoughts that fit inside them. Yet their order
was unclear, and I was no longer certain what had been stored on the disc and
what my memory had knotted on its own from the eluding threads. Only a fading
echo of what I had heard remained, and the words on the paper would inevitably
be mine. I hoped that the tale would nevertheless be hers, an unknown of whom
there was nothing else left. I hoped she would forgive me for what I had let
go.
I invited the voice to surface, its shape
grow sharper, until I discerned it as clearly as I ever could again. I placed
my pen on the paper again and let the memory guide my hand.
'The world as we know it believes in a
certain version of history,' I wrote. 'How the past-world was lost, how the
seas rose and turned the coasts into underwater deserts and ghost towns. We
have been told that once upon a time, winters were cold, vehicles fast, cities
higher and continents wider. There was no shortage of drinking water. Some of
this is probably true. Not the whole truth, certainly, because the whole truth
never survives, but not an outright lie, either.
We have also been told that winters vanished
because the world turned warmer on its own, as it always had, in ways that were
too complex for people to understand and too powerful for us to have any
influence over them. We have been taught that deserted lands and greedy oceans
and scorching winds were no doing of ours, that we couldn't have diverted the
change, that the best we could do was to go along with the unpredictable whims
of the planet.
These are the stories we know, but there are
others.
It all began slowly and almost unnoticed,
like major upheavals often do – so slowly that it was easy to ignore, for a
time. A flood here, a hurricane there, ten warm winters and then one unusually
cold – all things that could be contributed to chance and the natural order of
things. Even when the polar ice began to melt, it was said the changes wouldn't
be big. And who in the sky-scratching cities enclosed in their rush cared if in
a backwater mountain village the population had to leave their homes behind,
when the ice of the peaks turned into mounting, all-crushing streams? For some,
the change was even welcome: old oil wells were running dry, and new oil was
revealed under the polar ice. Countries began a race for marking it their own,
because humans cling to the life they know until they are violently torn away
from it.
Meanwhile the seas reached towards the
centres of the continents: first a finger-width every year, then two. Wells
around the coasts began to turn salty. Rain turned scarcer. And still people
looked away. The competition for oil turned into a quarrel, then into a battle.
Those who could afford it continued with their lives as ever before.'
I paused, drank some tea and ate a few
spoonfuls of porridge, which had grown lukewarm. Daylight was seeping in
sharper at the edges of the curtains, closer, nearly on my skin now. I had to
continue. I looked at what I had last written and sought the thought until I
grasped the story – or the spectre of the story, filtered through years and
memory.
'Only when the oceans began to swallow the
large coastal cities of wealthy countries and most of the oil found under the
ice had been used, people woke up to realise that the world as they knew it was
coming to an end.
The evacuation of the coasts began before I
was born, and no one knew for certain at the time how large areas would need to
be emptied and how quickly. My parents remembered that time. People, groceries, valuables and vehicles
were endlessly moved into temporary camps and new cities that were being built.
Much was left behind: people, as some always are, those who couldn't afford to
move away, or didn't want to, for many wish to stay at the place they consider
home even after the sea or some other entity has gnawed it unrecognisable.
Chattels, houses, dated technology. And books. States assured their citizens
that in the new living areas everyone would be assigned a new kind of messaging
machine that would also be suitable for reading electronic books – pod-books,
they were called. There were pod versions of nearly all books available, so it
didn't make sense to carry heavy piles of bound volumes, when there was already
so much to carry and move, and little space for it all.
Perhaps those holding power knew already at
the time that this would turn out to be useful.
Populations of whole countries escaped from
their homes. Other countries struggled under the pressure of these crowds,
trying to offer a place to stay and enough food for everyone. Wars over water
had already broken out in all silence earlier, but now the shortages became a
crying concern. The southern half of the North American continent and the
Mediterranean in Europe turned into desert; people began to wander from place
to place in search of water and food. South American continent survived on its
water resources, but became isolated from the rest of the world. In Asia the
power of New Qian grew, as they conquered new freshwater areas.
History tells that in the final oil war New
Qian fought for the waning oil resources of the North Pole with Northern
American Alliance. My parents used to tell that story, because it was the only
one they knew, and it was the same one I was taught at school. The war might
have been won, it was said, if two unfortunate incidents had not occurred
within only months from each other. First, a handful of terrorists who had
infiltrated the army exploded four oil rigs. The oil pipes deep in the ocean
bed were torn to pieces and black blood began to pour from the open veins of
the earth, piling on shores, suffocating plants and animals and poisoning
people, and there was nothing anyone could do to stop it. Yet the ocean was
vast, it was said, the seawater could swallow it, eventually. It didn't need to
be the end of the battle, and it didn't even need to be a warning sign.
But then something else happened. A secret
laboratory in Norway, which had been working on a biological weapon, suffered
an accident. As a consequence, a destructive bacteria escaped into the drinking
waters of Scandinavia, spreading and making people ill. It contaminated what
then was Norway, most of Sweden and part of Finnish Lapland. No one knows the
accurate number of people who fell ill and died from the diseases caused by the
oil and the bacteria. The official estimates range from ten thousand to half a
million.'
I too was familiar with this story. I had
always believed in it, because I had had no reason to doubt it. Now I believed
differently. I continued writing.
'The oil wars ended with the disaster of
Scandinavia. Only a few small patches of sea by the North Pole provided
possible access to the remaining oil, and there was no longer a safe route
leading to them through the contaminated areas. Getting hold of the oil had to
be abandoned as too dangerous. Countries laid down their weapons and finally
turned to look at the changed world, where the fuel had to be found somewhere
else than in the guts of the earth. The Lost Lands became no man's land,
protected by an international treaty that strictly prohibited any country from
trying to access them while the area was left to recover from the disaster.
Now, think of the allure of the situation.
The world was in chaos and most of written
history was in danger of drowning into all-devouring seas or had already
crumbled into shreds of paper mist in the mud of the bottom. People were
reading barely anything but pod-books. All that was needed was someone to erase
the knowledge that was not wanted, and rewrite it in a form that would
strengthen the goals of those holding power. With a few pushes of buttons the
history would look different, and the updated version would be sent to any
market stall selling pod-books, any school, every news service and archive.
Who wouldn't erase from memory the deeds
they are not proud of, if it was possible?
At the same time, who wouldn't save a story
that was meant to disappear, if it captured their interest and they saw
something worth preserving hidden in it?
New Qian wanted to hide its deeds, but also
keep a record of them, and that was the one weakness they succumbed to.
Top scientists and military officers drew up
a secret report of the events that led to the world as we know it and of the
estimated water resources in the Lost Lands. But unbeknownst to others, one of
their group had joined a resistance movement working to liberate water from
under military control. He stole a copy of the report and handed it to the
resistance, where it has been circulated from group to group, until it came to
my hands. Several hard copies are hidden around the world, and its contents
have also been learned by heart by many people. The copy of my group was
destroyed, and therefore I'm recording my own version.
I have seen the secret report, I have seen
the exact figures, I have seen the eyewitness accounts of the soldiers and
officers who were there and took part in the operation. I have seen a video of
the meeting where the decision was taken, and I have seen a specialist prove it
to be genuine.
I
know the official history is lying.
The world did not
grow warmer on its own. It grew warmer because people
changed its natural order with their actions, because their fuel and their way
of life increased the temperatures, and because they would not admit to this
change and prevent it while there was still time. It is the doing of the
past-world people that we now live in a world without winters, where quarrels
over water lead to bloodshed and where coastlines are belted by spectres of
drowned cities, blind monuments of lost life.
I also know that contaminating the Lost
Lands was not an attack of a fanatic group of terrorists or an accident. It was
a purposeful and planned mass murder committed by New Qian knowing it would
cause the death of millions of people. When it turned out that it was losing
the battle for the last oil wells, the military leaders were given orders to
make sure that if they could not access the oil, no one could.
They arranged the destruction of the oil
rigs and planted the bacteria in the drinking water. They fabricated the story
about a terrorist attack and an accident. It was easy to find a dozen or so
scapegoats among the soldiers and scientists, who were then sentenced to death.
Over fifteen million people lived in the
Lost Lands. Less than half of them managed to escape. Eight and a half million
people in Scandinavia died from diseases caused by the oil pollution and the
bacteria.
When you add the millions who died from
hunger, thirst or illnesses in the sea-conquered coasts or crowded camps, or
were worn to death in illegal weapons factories or crushed in battle – my
estimate is that the final count was several dozen million dead.
Only because some of the past-world people
gazed blindly into the glistening black hole waiting for them under the fading
ice layers of the north. Only because they saw something in its dark mouth that
they thought they held some inexplicable privilege to, a right they built from
hollow wind and that had nothing to do with the eternal laws of earth and water
and sky.
This
is the truth about past-world. If you could ask water, it would tell you this
is how it all happened, because water never lies. It knows that the world did
not change on its own. It is the way we made it, and the way we left it, and it
can only become what we make of it.'
The thread of words across the paper came to
an end. I lifted my pen from the page and shook my wrist. I turned back the
pages until I reached the spread where I had started and read through what I
had written. When I reached the end, I took up the pen again and added:
'This story was told in the log of the
Jansson expedition on Twilight Century, and these lines record it as it was
remembered by Noria Kaitio. If someone finds them and reads them, perhaps it is
a sign that water has been broken free from its chains and belongs to everyone
again.'
There was nothing else left to say. I closed
the book.
Thanks for this Emmi! It sounds so cool!
Natalie J. Damschroder is an award-winning author of contemporary and
paranormal romance, with an emphasis on romantic adventure. She has had 24
novels, 7 novellas, and 16 short stories published by several publishers, most
recently with Soul Mate Publishing, Entangled Publishing, and Carina Press. She
recently debuted her Fusion Series, a young adult paranormal adventure series,
with Full Fusion, as NJ Damschroder. Learn more about those books here.
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